Baltimore will get a new museum devoted to black athletes in the Northwest section of the city that will officials hope will jumpstart the area's revitalization. Full Story »
Posted by Mary Hartney - via Bmore Media
This will be great for the Northwest part of Baltimore. While this does create jobs and will bring in tourists to see the museum, the biggest contribution I thought of went unmentioned in this article. I think that this is a great way to educate people of Baltimore's fine African-America athletes who might otherwise go unspoken of. By educating the community of past ledgends, some may be inspired to follow in their footprints. To me, that is bigger than 85 jobs.
Right off the bat, in the first paragraph, you find yourself staring at a grammatical error. Not a good start to any story. This story does provide good facts, I will give it that, but that's about it. There are other grammatical errors sprinkled throughout the article, and some slight repetition is pretty noticeable. Short and sweet and to the point is what this writer was going for, but they got a little less than half of that. The only thing the reader leaves with from this article is the information provided, not with any excellent writing tips from by the author. This story tries to be better, and I can see the writer doing better in the future, but not today.
This story is informative and basically gives first insight into a new project in the Baltimore area. There is a typo in the lead which distracts attention from the story somewhat, however this is a strictly hard news story that serves the purpose of getting the information to the public. Does not provide quotes from many sources but overall gives an overview of what the project will entail and basic plans for its construction.
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