Wordy, boring introduction: 4 introductory paragraphs can be reduce to 3 sentences.
On Taxes: good presentation but only one expert source; no analysis of past and present consequences of changes to taxation.
On Social Security: no background, no expert source, no contrasting analysis or significance of changes sought by McCain; one-sided critique – Obama’s lack of clarity.
Health Care: extremely light expose; no expert sources — there are an infinite number, particularly medical and academic, the ones that really know about this important subject.
Homeowners: nice information but presented with no cohesion. What does this all mean to the voter/homeowner?
Energy: same thing. Where do these two candidates come from with their ideas on this? What factions support them? Would not that give you an idea of the substance of the proposals by each?
Gov. Spending: What “experts”? Why are they skeptical? How?
Good start, but it needs substance and intelligent cohesion.