I find the article is partially one-sided. Predominately the article is about the good the "Believe" campaign has done and how many people are stepping up and trying to improve Baltimore. There are only a couple statistics to show people that disapproves the campaign.

The author uses a lot generalizations and doesn't provide any sources to back their claim. The author is intelligent, yes, but his voice gets lost in his wide-range of vocabulary.

I like the way O'Malley briefly summarizes the purpose of the "Believe" campaign. I wished with the statistics that he used had sources or even used hyperlinks to strengthen his opinion. Also, a quote or two wouldn't hurt.

The author failed to include vital information about why Kweisi Mfume decided not to run for mayor. Also, I would like to know if Mfume ever wanted to run for mayor in the first place.

I particularly enjoy how Smith related the article to the reader by using a human source. This is a very well organized article. She led the article with the Malaney's, and then, she ended the article with them with a very strong quote. I also enjoy the use of statistics from good sources. Although, I felt the story drifted towards the sympathic side. As if Smith wanted me to feel sorry for the Malaney's. Which had me thinking, am I suppose to do something about this? Overall, it is a very strong article.

I like the way the story is written. The first couple graphs to give the reader an understanding of who Bob Cherry is. But I do believe the reader could become confused on whether the story is about Bob Cherry, instead of what Bob Cherry is doing for Baltimore City.

The article does conclude that elected officials do live in their supposed residences...that's it.

I find the story well written with its wide variety of quotes and anecdotes to give a good lasting image of who Donald Schaefer was. Even though I liked the ending, I feel the last two paragraphs did not flow well together. Also, I feel that some more contrasting quotes would make the story less biased, but not necessary because it is local news. I feel the story could use some more background information, especially how Schaefer grew up.

Although it is an entertaining article, I believe that it did get off topic, especially when the author implemented some random trivia. I wish the author could have added some research about the snakehead. For example, if they could really survive outside water.

I thought that story was well-written. It has all the essential needs: sets the scene, describes Chametz to readers who don't know what it is, explains why the ritual is performed at Pimlico, and quotes of people who readers can relate to.

For such a long story, I found it very engaging. The quotes are well sourced. And the breaks in the story alert the reader in a change of topic which helps from confusing the reader.

No. Although the author used two sources, the sources that were used are bias because they are from local mediums. Also, I discovered that the sources used to not have realible sources. It seems all of them could have been searched off of Google. While the author made an attempt to counter the racial relation in Martha's Vineyard stating that it was not the Brazil drivers fault, they could have added more credible sources to balance the story. I also find that even though the title includes Barack Obama, he has little to no relavence to the story.

I thought that this article was written the way it should be written, in chronological order. With a brief history of Osama bin Laden, his rise to power, and his demise. The links and videos give more background to the article adding texture. The author did a great job of not becoming bias towards the subject. And I thought the ending quote was a fantastic finish to the article.

I thought just these two encounters that the author had with Schaefer spoke volumes to the person he was.

The quotes are not very strong and I believe the writting can be tightened, especially towards the end about the budget cuts. It could be condensed. The quotes seemed to be empty and have no real information behind it.

I find some of the quotes contradicting. She say's she is against Obama's stance, but then she thinks we should help. If the author could clearly identify the stance Obama has on Libya, it would balance out the story.

This is just a very minuscule glimpse into the bed bug problem around the United States. I wish the author would have added some statistics to make the story stronger, which would give more relavence to a larger audience. Also, the author could have added some helpful tips about protecting oneself from bed bugs.

The areas that excelled: 1. Great title and opening lead. -Something that should not be overlooked, but the title is a great attention grapper and the lead entices the reader. 2. Great overview of the story. -The reader does get the sense of the struggle of passing the bill for same sex marriage. First, stating the issues of why the bill is not yet passed and having statements from the parties that are for and against the bill. 3.Supplying important information. -Explaining the current situation of the bill and the process it must go through. This is very important for readers that are not familiar with the legislative process. 4. Great use of pictures. -Having three pictures that show supporters, protestors, and the House ... More »