The lead is very clear and straight to the point. It would be a good idea to add exact quotes rather than summarizing what Thoms said. Thoms' decision to act was a very strong one, and a lot of potentially good quotes are there. A link to the video may be helpful, if it is still on youtube (it may not be if it is too graphic). The article does not completely reflect the headline, though. The reader would expect to see a lot of quotes and reflection from Thoms as well as quotes from people that are praising her, and her side of the story, event though it is a short article from a radio station. Instead, the reporter briefly talks about Thoms' intervention and then talks about the case and the woman who was charged. The photo is a ... More »

This article does a great job of reminding students about Yeardley Love dealing with domestic violence and reminding readers that she is not the only one who is affected by domestic violence. The writer shows initiative in going to the conference and interviewing people attending as well as experts on the subject. I think the writer could include more information in some areas, though. For example, the reporter writes about a students response to the presentation but does not report on the actual presentation. The article includes a lot of good advice for people who are in a domestic violence situation. Some of the information provided could be sources better, though. I think the last quote really sums up the article. The ... More »

The lead gets straight into the story, and people who are unaware of what occured in McDonald's can still understand what happened. The second paragraph seems to try to include too much information. Although it is a follow-up story, the information could be separated a little bit better. I don't quite understand the link to youtoube since it does not send the reader to fhe video in question. The article does a good job of including quotes from Thoms who tried to stop the fight. The article includes a lot of research on Teonna Monae Brown. The reporter does not source the information though, or say "according to police." The reporter mentions that Polis gave interviews after going to the hospital, but does not inlcude any quotes ... More »

The article starts off emitting opinions when the reporter says, "per se." The writer may be attempting to allude to the rumor but instead seems to be putting down Mfume. The second paragraph of the article does not connect well to the lead. It includes irrelevent information about Mayor Sheila Dixon and then attempts to relate it back to Mfume at the end, inefectively. This paragraph also includes way too much information. The writer includes very few quotes, and some of those quotes are not even complete. For example, the writer quotes, "not going to happen." This is not a full quote. Also, the reporter shows no initiative because he/she recieved this and all other quotes from another publication, Investigative Voice. The ... More »

I think the reporter should mention who Marsian DeLellis is even if it is very general in the first paragraph, even though it is supposed to have an element of surprise. There are a great variety of good quotes. The pictures are also very artistic and good. At some points, the writer could let the quotes speak for themselves instead of trying to explain them. There is a lot of good research, and overall the article is good journalism.

The lead gets straight to the point. The reporter should use quotes from officials at Under Armor to prove that the cotton t-shirts are the cause of the increase in revenue. By saying that the cotton t-shirts are responsible, it seems like the reporter is just generalizing this conclusion. The quote used by the CEO only states that the market opportunity was broadened, not that this is the reason for the increase in revenue.The reporter says that "the compay" saiid something which is very vague and unclear. The last two sentences explaining the figures of dilluted earnings could be explained a lot more clearly.

The story has a lot of good sources from both people involed in the ball and the experts. I don't understand why the event that covered in November is being covered now, though. I'm not sure when this article came out. I think the journalist does a good job of going in depth and explaining how many people were tested and how many were positive.There are also a lot of good links used, and the article is set up well. I also like that the writer goes even more in depth and talks about the issues that other cities face in their "ballroom" events. The writer does a good job of making the story tell itself and leaving out their own opinion.

Although many journalists had strong feelings toward Schaefer, this reporter included a little too mcuh opinion in his story. The article has good links, and a few good quotes, but more quotes should have been recieved by other officials and average people. It is important to know how Schaefer's death affected everybody. Also, the reporter includes a general statement that he says various officials say. Using the term various officials is too broad though. More exact quotes should be used. Overall, the writer includes a little too much opinion and not enough quotes.

The writer could include a few more quotes, even though it is a short article. Although there is a lot of good information, some more can be included. The writer could include how the female crabs were going to be protected and what measures were going to be taken. Also, the last paragraph in the article is not well cited. Exactly which official indicated that they were loosening the restrictions? The article is very relevent, though since the crabs are coming back after the deep freeze in the winter.

The story is very well written and does a good job of including quotes from average people and their opinions of Schaefer. I think the article could use some statistics to prove that that neighborhood is now predominantly African American. Also, I think the writer insists that the neighborhood changed because Schaefer left, but I'm sure other factors probably came into play to change the neighborhood. The writer captures Schaefer's personality through the quotes describing how he acted. I like how the article concludes by showing the artifacts that he left behind in his old house. The conclusion ties back to the main point of the story--that a person responsible for changing the city has died.

The reporter includes a lot of great quotes from many sources. The reporter also includes a lot of facts about his life and the story is very well written. The article does not mention his actual death, though. Some facts about his death would be interesting and helpful to know about. It is a little dificult to tell who said some of the quotes, but it is understandable because it is on the radio. I think the reporter did a good job of telling the public about his life and causing the readers to think his work about him after he died. The reporter also captured his "zaniness." I like how the reporter begins with the cliche that he was bigger than life and then later in the article explains that a 7-foot-statue of him was made.

The article provides a lot of good links to who Edgar Allen Poe is and some information on the Highlandtown diner. The lead does a good job of bringing back an issue that is similar to one that took place 150 years ago. The article doesn't really focus enough on the "Pennies for Poe" campaign, but rather seems to be making fun of it. The quotes that the author use make Alvarez seem nonchalant and uncaring. Also, the author does not need to say "when i asked..." but should rather just state what the person said. We already know that they were interviewing the person. There is also no source for the information that the Poe House lost $85,000 in city funding. Other people could have been interviewed for their take on the issue ... More »

The article is filled with quotes from many different people. The lead is engaging and shows how an average person and human rights activist in Bahrain life is affected by what is going on there. The article also has a lot of good links to other articles and information. A suggestion would be to add some of the tweets and facebook statuses that were discouraged in Bahrain.

At the beginning of the article, the reporter beats around the bush. I think that the reporter should just say what "changes" means. The reporter does a good job of explaining how the fire department works and how many people work on each aspect of the cases, but the information is not sourced well. A lot of the quotes are of officials and other people saying that they do not know or do not want to comment on the issue. I think this shows that the reporter is trying to show that they are being secretive which brings in a little bit of bias. Opinion is also present when the reporter says that Kamenetz "has preached" using more technology and eliminating workers. The story is well written but a lot of bias can be eliminated and a ... More »

The article fails to source any of the people that it references. I don't really see the clear connection between the Washington D.C. problems and the Baltimore ones. The writer mentions various times that Baltimore rarely has problems with cheating and has taken reasonable actions in dealing with any possible cheating, yet still concludes that Baltimore needs to watch out for the cheating epidemic. It is good that the story supplies links to previous articles and the names of people involved, but I think just the names of the people are not enough for sourcing. There is a good amount of research done, but some quotes would be helpful in understanding how this problem is affecting both people in D.C. and in Baltimore.

The article has a large amount of sources and does a good job of avoiding personal bias. The lead could have been a little bit less confusing, but the next paragraph makes it more clear. Some aspects could be sourced better because the writer says that some leaders said something rather than giving an exact name. There are quotes from both sides of the issue. Paragraphs are short and concise.

The writer does a good job of enlightening readers about an issue that is taking a back seat to other issues that are deemed important by the government. The article could be sourced better because some quotes are said to be from "local newspapers" which is a little vague. The story has a wide variety of quotes from different places, but there are little quotes from research. The story flows smoothly. The beginning of the story matches with the end and causes the reader to question how much this problem is ignored by the president because of other "important" issues. Also, there is a good use of an individual story (the car accident) to bring this story to light, butboth sides of this incident are not covered. There is a little ... More »