The story had a strong lead which grabbed my attention. Although, the article could have been more indepth, instead of just stating facts.
Ashley T. Williams
Member (since March 2011)I am a student at Towson University who writes for the campus paper. I have also attended an community college for three years where I also wrote for the campus newspaper. I enjoy writing articles that I know people will gain something from and I like knowing that many people can enjoy the story that I put togehter.
This story was thoughtful and sincere, but the material within the article seemed to jump around. The information wasn't logically ordered.
Even though the article is interesting and completely relevant to college students, the article itself did not contain a lot of information. The article consisted mainly of quotes and not 'meaty' information or details. It was interesting to see different people's point of views on the topic though.
This article offered so much information. Considering that the tornadoes hit so close to the area in which I live in, I was really interested to find out all this information The article was wel written and contained so much valuable information that I have not heard before.
The article included a lot of heartfelt information, however some of the sentences/paragraphs were extra wordy. Some of the excess wording cold have been taken out and it still would have been just as informative. The lead sentence wasn't as effective as it could have been because of the extra wording.
Even though I am unable to go to Tigerfest because of work, the article was quite informative. Considering I am a new student and don't know much about Tigerfest, the article offered a lot of detailed, behind the scenes information about the event and the different aspects that go into the event. The article wasn't that "meaty" with content but it still offered valuable information and made me aware of many things.
The story was scattered for the most part. The lead/beginning was not very appealing and was hard to understand where the story was coming from. Not a great introduction.
This story brings to life the true reality of social media and interaction. Even though this article is not a hard news story, it was utterfly fascinating that Facebook may take over high school reunions and make them non-existent. I had never thought of this point before but after reading the article I am not totally surprised by the fact that soon there will be no need for high school reunions thanks to Facebook. People can just stay in touch that way.
I liked how the author took a chance with writing this story. Given that this was a risky chance to take, the article is written well with many significant details to back up the information.
The story was very relevant to the issues that are concerning areas all over the country. This article which mainly covers illegal immigrants does hit a soft-spot regarding many Americans and how they view the situation. With the one exerpt where the young woman was killed in a car accident with an illegal immigrant, the residents in the area were quick to blame the illegal immigrant who did not have a valid license. It turns out however, that the woman was speeding at high rates Maybe this gentleman shouldn't have been driving, but the residents as well shouldn't have been quick to blame or judge because essentially the woman's speed was probably the reason she was killed. This article just shows that Americans shouldnt be so ... More »




